This is my explanation about how mummies were made
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How Mummies were made
After death, the Egyptians believed there was an afterlife. Because a body would be needed to enter the afterlife, the Egyptians mummified the dead body.
Firstly the body was placed on a table. The embalmer removed the internal organs, (apart from the heart), with a steel hook through the nose.
After the body was emptied, linen was placed inside the body to suck up the moisture. Then the body was covered with salt and left for forty days to remove any leftover moisture. After forty days the linen was removed from the inside of the body, and sawdust and spices were inserted. The sawdust and spices,(expensive and hard to get), were required to help keep the body’s shape.
Next it was time to wrap the body. The head and neck were wrapped first with white linen and then the rest of the body parts. Finally a spell book was placed in the hands of the dead body.
The final resting place of the mummy was in a tomb. Because the mummifying process was very expensive, only the very wealthy were able to do it.
you've found lots of examples of AAAWWUBBIS and fanboys in the writing. I like that you have writen a sentence at the beginning of a blog post to tell your reader what your blog is about. You've said that it is your explanation though, It is actually a writing sample that you looked at, be sure to show this, otherwise, people might think that you wrote the story.
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